For my introduction, I introduced Cuddy and I had not done that till later in the paper for my first draft. I also tweaked my thesis some so that it made more sense for the reader. In my first draft I mostly gave an explanation of Discourse in the first few paragraphs, for my final I added more of my thoughts and ideas relating to the acquisition of a Discourse. I didn’t have many quotes from Cuddy and I actually hardly used her in my essay at all so I sent back and added her thoughts to help strengthen my argument. As far as new paragraphs go, I didn’t really add a completely new one, however, I did split one or two long paragraphs into two shorter paragraphs. Towards the end of my paper I realized a paragraph would make more sense earlier in the paper so I swapped the two. Overall I feel that the adjustments I made strengthened my paper.
First Year Studies
